Question:
What do you think of these lyrics(Christian)?
2009-03-21 21:59:02 UTC
Just wrote this...be nice im only 13 lol...and it was done in a 30 minute time period, so what do you think could be added? anything not click? is kind of a "rap" song, so the beat is just reppetition of rhymes, and stuff...


Father God we are humbled in your presence, let your love corress us, everlasting essence...let your future be mine, so we see eye-to-eye, let your hopes be my dreams and my wants be your needs... and when i want the things, you know are gonna cause me pain, i pray you break my fingers and make them ache. and that the ache would bring wisdom , and youd let me see , the things i want are not the things that i need...and if at all possible, give me faith unnstoppable, so that when i'm around miracles are probbable. dont let me hunger for riches, or let possessions bring me joy, but let your love be my riches and let my ears hear your quiet voice. I want to be a Godly one, one that not only knows you, but emulates you and shows you... in them... i want to walk down the street, and that the people i meet, know who i belong to, through their eyesight and tunnel view... see man look on the outside, i know you know that its true, and if there's somebody lost, i want them to look at me and see you... Let my humility, be a beauty to see, that i never get proud or without fault i think. That my *********, would not affect my ableness, to do works for you.. God i know its true, this is a problem to which i am prone... my flesh is like stone.. but you gotta break it, cause i cant take it, and i know i'll never make it less you shake it..... Never let my light go out.. my faith broken down.. my song without sound.. but let your strength give me hope, that i can always cope, and when im the lowest of the low, your love will stilll show.. give me friends to hold on to, when i need support to do what i need to do, the kind of friends that dont envy or lie, they dont get caught up in sin and self pride, but they help me grow closer to you, through their friendship and the things they say and do... let others see through me, to the joy and the beauty, that you Jesus gave to me... let my understanding and forgiveness never cease to amaze, so that others will try me just to test your perfect grace. i know its a lot to ask... but you said what i want i can have, thats accrding to your plan, Redemption to all man... so i know that theres ups and downs, and life is a book profound, but through all the strays and wicked choices i make i want to know for sure, my eternity is secure...

my one last request, and this is by far the best - i need to know for sure, can't be doubtin and insecure, but if im gonna make it im not gonna be surprised, im not gonna make it heaven body shaking and closing my eyes...and i know its an eternal need, but father you see, to live i gotta breathe, and my breath bring me greed, and my greed makes me heed, to satanic things, that i should never see, my greed births a seed, of pride, rebellion, and all things humanity, all these bad in me, and all this brings me to my knees..but see to live i gotta breath. what i'm saying here, or trying to make clear, is that im gonna mess up, fail miss and fall in the dust, but i wanna know so well your love, that there is a never a doubt that you'll pick me up. can you give me a sign, when im feeling demise, like im gonna die, and despised, but in spite, give me a sign, you'll never leave my side , and give me a verse, to hang onto through the curse, that with nothing but hurt, i can hang on to holiness, that my life will surely show this, that i wouldnt fall prey, to any sin any night or day. this is the prayer that i pray. this is my prayer.





constructive criticism always accepted with a smile =)
Seven answers:
2009-03-21 22:10:28 UTC
DOG is GOD spelled backwards!!!

Nice job sweety! Wonderful, creative way to be spending your time. Nice Christian Rap.

A nice break from the usual questions on here.
Senior Airman Gregory C
2009-03-21 22:59:44 UTC
I'm golad you're writting Christian songs but this is the dog sections. It looks like it was a geniune mistake and not done of purpose so I'll answer the question. I think it is pretty good. It would be easier to give you a better response if you were singing it and I could hear the beat of the song. There shouldn't be any cursing in a Christan song thougoh.
nancy b
2009-03-21 22:06:08 UTC
Thank God I taught my dog to sing amazing grace!
Moondog
2009-03-21 22:07:55 UTC
This is the dog section of the forum.
Highbread Dingbat
2009-03-21 22:03:31 UTC
I think that this is the dog section.

I apologize, and am not meaning to be rude, but religion has no place in a dog section :)
Chaoscleaner
2009-03-21 22:06:23 UTC
Well....DOG is GOD spelled backwards, so you sorta got the right catagory. lol
VeryBored
2009-03-21 22:05:11 UTC
wrong section


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