Question:
Do you think this is an effective advertisement for dog training?
2008-03-06 23:38:39 UTC
http://xs125.xs.to/xs125/08105/dogpromo3sample658.png

I'm open for critiques, suggestions, etc. :) Thanks!
Seventeen answers:
2008-03-07 00:38:31 UTC
I don't think thats very effective, but its a good draft for an add.

I made this improved advertisement for your dog training.

Its less messy and cluttered than your original draft.

http://img132.imageshack.us/img132/8378/redroveroo6.jpg

The lines on the bottom are for writing your cell or email address sideways, so people can rip off a piece and put it in their pocket if they don't have a pen with them at the time they see your advertisement. You fold the paper along the longest line, and turn the paper over then fold again, so it will be easy for them to rip off and not tear the advertisement. Cut the little lines along the paper for the contact info.



I should note that its good to use different colors in advertisements that are going to be the same size as a typical piece of paper. Some people get confused at what part of the sentence they have read last because each sentence is the same color. It should be remembered though that the colors have to look good together. Like never mix green with purple when writing different sentences for advertisements.
emaleariel
2008-03-07 08:18:28 UTC
It's a good start. But you're going to have to make some changes. Try writing down everything you want to say in the ad on paper. Cut them out, & try rearranging them to find the position you want them in. Look at a lot of other ads to get ideas. A lot of it is poorly written, ie: "leave a msg". ON my cell, not AT my cell, "super low dog dog training prices" (in the balloon near the dog) and the top heading is pretty bad. There are too many different fonts, sizes, & colors going on, it makes it difficult to read. I'd go for a more classy look, in greys, black & white with possibly one accent color (red?) I'd put a nice border around it, & I would use a different heading. "Have a dog? Want one?" is a little odd. It sounds like you are selling or giving away dogs. Something like "Professional Dog Training" (if you're an amateur, you could say "Experienced Dog Trainer") now available for: then list your services, using bullets in front of each one: Basic training, Behavioral problems, & finish your list. THEN, under that I'd put, "Additional services" & say "Dog walking, etc.

I would avoid using the word "troubles" & use "problems" in its place. Also, I'd be careful of how you use the terms "assistance, information, sources" since they all mean pretty much the same thing, but you don't say what type of assistance, info, or sources. It probably seems like I'm picking your ad apart, but it's constructive criticism that I hope will help you make a better ad. And it has a good start. It's just a little scattered & you need to focus it a little more so that it's direct, clean, & to the point... as well as pleasing to the eye. Good luck, let us know what the final product looks like!
DP
2008-03-07 08:20:10 UTC
No.. It is too busy.. You have too many colours, and too many different fonts. It's not clear and to the point. It's confusing and I don't find it appealing.. You should use black for your lettering and only use another colour to emphasize something you want to make sure people see.. Phone number etc.

Dump the " Hope you meet you soon " and also up the side where it says ' if we don't see improvements, you'll get a refund ' People know that they can't trust statements like that.. All you have to do is say that you see no real improvements. You get your money and they are no farther ahead. The title makes no sense ' have a dog, want one ' Are you training dogs or selling dogs? I would change the line that says ' I offer.. to something more clear.. You have assistance, information and sources.. which to me all mean the exact same thing..
♥ ac ♥
2008-03-07 07:47:52 UTC
I agree with previous posts, simpleness gets the point across and too many wild/crazy fonts may seem unprofessional. Also, I'm not sure if you noticed at the bottom where you made a typo. I believe you meant to put "Hope TO meet you soon" and not "Hope you meet you soon." (Just a little point out, not to be rude.)



Also, if you believe you match competitor's prices, I would stress that you are willing to match prices, only if you are though, lying never helps a situation.



There are a lot of words though, although, I agree with a previous poster, the picture of the pup is way cute. :)



Good luck with your upcoming business. :)
Arlene G
2008-03-07 07:46:57 UTC
Too busy. You ought to simplify the fonts and only emphasize key words. Also, the "have a dog? want one?" header seems to imply that you sell dogs. I'd get rid of that entirely and instead put the name of your service there.



You want to use, at most, 2 colors for the emphatic statements. The idea is to draw the eye to the information you want them to remember, so the name, what you do and your contact information should be colorized and or bolded and the rest should be plain black type.
doshiealan
2008-03-07 07:55:45 UTC
I'm afraid, although the idea is good, and the message is clear, the execution is deplorable. Why don't you read what you have written and correct your mistakes (Two "you"'s in the last line for instance.)



It's also a good idea to punctuate properly. If you don't, people like me will say you don't pay attention to detail (and you don't) and that is not the image you are trying to get across.



As it stands, it would prevent me from ever having anything to do with you. It's careless and slipshod and definitely a non-starter. Try harder next time.
2008-03-09 17:32:01 UTC
TO much going on it there , the words are not all the same way up or the same text.



It makes it look Messy.



On there it should say your moto , what you do , prices and how to contact you .

All in a easy to read font and the same way up.

To much text and people won't pay attention to it

Good luck X
2008-03-07 07:47:21 UTC
I agree with some of the other answers, way too much going on. You have to simplify everything, consumers are confused very easily, so you have to get your point across very quickly because they won't want to read that whole thing.



I think this website will help a little when thinking about design for just about anything.

http://www.lifehack.org/articles/communication/design-better-with-crap.html
Kali_girl825
2008-03-07 07:43:44 UTC
I think it is a good advertisement. But I would add some detail about exactly what you do. Also adding paw prints etc... helps in a ad such as yours. Maybe go with a couple of different mock up ads to see which people respond to better.



Good Luck!



Kali :-)
cooky
2008-03-07 07:50:39 UTC
Sorry, but no I don't think it is an effective advertisement. Some of the writing is scribbled, making it difficult to read. Also, it has terrible grammar.
Garett F
2008-03-07 07:43:43 UTC
Cut out 3/4ths of the words, and your in good to go.



Like the above poster stated, keep it simple.
2008-03-07 07:41:55 UTC
It's cute but maybe you should have the words in all the same font, all the crazyness of it seems kind of unprofessional. Maybe just one cute quirky font is good enough.
2008-03-07 07:41:39 UTC
I think there are either too many words on it or too big of words. makes the ad looked cluttered which is not appealing to the eye. the doggie pic looked nice though.
Stevie
2008-03-07 07:56:53 UTC
have a more simple font and darker colors so theyre easier to read.



instead of 'have a dog? want one?'

try "have dog questions?"
scott9292003
2008-03-07 07:44:30 UTC
It's not bad, But you need to make a change. The part that says, "Hope you meet you soon. " Should say something like, "Hope to meet you soon."
Sarah
2008-03-07 07:41:55 UTC
So messy. Simple simple simple gets the point across.
2008-03-07 08:21:44 UTC
Hope you meet you soon? that looks like a typo fix it


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